Notes from September 21st

Here's the critique we got from class. I'm sorry it took me a while. I was a bit busy with stuff.

Rebeca:
Establish the bird eating starfish and puffer fish at the beginning. Have the female octopus react to the reason why she finds him disgusting. Such as, "you're so square" and have her draw a square. Or the sponge she's using can be a square. Have the bubbles/ink be in a square shape.

When the octopus first sees the bird, you can have sun rays behind her-making her all heavenly. When he reaches up for her, have her far away so he's really stretching out for her. When the other birds are making fun of her, have their head crane around looking or have them pointing at her.

Nick:
Add the Dolphin helping the octopus while he launches himself.

With the lasso: Have the bird spot the star fish. Swoops down and then have him get excited, sneak up behind a rock and try to catch her. "Secretly trying to catch her" Or something like that.

For myself:

Have the bird do a double take when she spots the puffer fish. Have the bird fly up and lick her chops. Then a panel with the puffer fish scared, and then finally have him toot.

Karsen:
Have some quick cuts switching back and forth between the hang glider and the octopus.

Angela:

After the bird give the octopus the peck, have the octopus do a cute/shy pose and then have him hug her.

And that's it I think. Also try to incorporate the main bird instead of random birds.