Notes from October 05

Here are the notes from class.

Rebecca:

Make sure he has a distinctive square shape. I think you had one frame, where it was questionable.
Fix the direction when he first sees the bird
Fix the staging with the bird and her friends. She should be in the middle and everything should be really clear.
With the determined shot, make him more thinking and less angry looking.

Nick:
With the two girl birds and her shot. Keep the two friends close and keep her separated. Have them be more gestural.
Suggestion- have the starfish flip over with ti's butt in the air shaking when the bird comes to try and eat it.
Fix the angle of projectile with the dolphin and starfish.
Reverse the shot when he's coming out of the whale. (Which I think you did already).

Myself:
Have the complete back shot of the octopus doing something with his tentacles.
Make the starfish more grumpy.
Have the camera zip up to the blow fish.
Don't crop too much of the blow fish.
Have him blow into the blow fish, and as he gets bigger, the camera backs up.
Frame the blow fish with clouds as he drifts by.
Have the bird look up for consistency.
Push the Z-axis more for when they're skipping on the water.

Karsen:
Make the octopus happy for seeing the bird on the plane.
Suggestion- Perhaps add the starfish to the airplane to bring him back. If you do, make him absolutely miserable.
Add a shot of the octopus going through the water and the shark exiting.

Angela:
Push the look of concern on the bird.
Have more than one hand hugging her at the very end.
Don't just have her flying with her friends at the end. Have her see what she's done wrong. Do an "oh no" expression, have the other birds point and laugh, make her look hesitant, perhaps have her look back and forth, and then a "screw it" expression, and have her go help the octopus.

That's it! Keep up the awesome work everyone. I'll fix the bird designs and have it up by tomorrow. I don't think the boards have to be on model yet, since it's still the roughs. I'm not sure though. It's your call. :)